Apr 14, 2015

this weeks cyph.




@M.I.C. @LasiK @Jet @Mikey1990 @Slyk @Man On The Moon @Grimace @IAmReal @Michael Scott @Radeem @Bleed @Fire Squad @JCinator @FreeAgent @Sign Language @FlawlessT @Crossley @DJ Lithium @Creation @BoshtrichBurger @Skippy
lyrics:
Im noddin in and out of common sense and my accomplishments/
started with a binge now I get a twinge when Im upset/
Leading me to percocete, xanies if it hurts to think/
Nervous wreck, I aint seen my family since like January/

Actually its been growing bit by bit like annually/
Birth defects, a crater bigger than a bird’s nest/
Nursing it, it’s hidden in my chest I think/
Best to just drink another juice and gin and wish on wine just on a whim

Wish I died when I was six/
Thats when I think I hit my peak/
Naked now I seek reprise, relief, a way to tame this beast/
Facing Zion, heading east, but first I need this case dismissed/

Basically a baser need entered into entity/
Base and weed, lines of dreams, snorting on some miracles/
A brick of white wed to me, weaponry, let it ring/
Bury bonds late after dark way out the park runnin home/

Removed my mom and them surgically, it hurt to see/
No anesthesia but soon I earned myself a canopy of substances/

 

Apr 14, 2015

I like this, but your voice is too tamed. I really liked the range on Sweat it Out, maybe go for that in your future work. Nevertheless, this was good.

 

Apr 14, 2015

i have a tip, you need to emphasize the end of bars more. you're not convincing with what you said like

"Wish I died when I was six/
Thats when I think I hit my peak/"

Should hit hard, but you're rushing out lines so much that you're saying them softly and unintelligibly instead of convincingly and forcefully

 

Apr 14, 2015

dissing me w/ that no mention bruh

anyways, I like this pretty well. sound quality good, so I'm assuming you fixed the export problem. only other thing I have to say is that (and this may just be me) 0:30 sounds slightly forced but eh

 

Apr 14, 2015

yeah i changed it haha, and whoops didnt see that i didnt mention you! and yeah i said January like janrery

good advice man, thanks. i need to punch in more so im straining myself at the end of bars.

 

Apr 14, 2015

I actually meant where you said actually, I didn't even notice that

 

Apr 15, 2015

hahah yeah i stretched that out for sure

whatd you think about the mix here? i think the vocals are too quite tbh

 

Apr 15, 2015

I actually like the vocals where they're at. I can hear them and the beat without them conflicting with each other and everything sounds pretty clear imo.

 

Apr 15, 2015

Heard this earlier... great structure-- just wish you were a little louder..but overall

 

Apr 15, 2015

Not bad. You had a flow going which is nice. I'm a sucka for a laconic flow tho.

 

Apr 15, 2015

 

Apr 15, 2015

i like your voice and flow on this. the vocals couldve been a little louder but it was nice.

 

Apr 15, 2015

In my opinion, with how mellow this beat is and laid back your flow is you should not have to punch in. Focus on your breathing so that you can get these bars out effortlessly. Also, write s--- you can spit throughout. How the f--- you gonna spit some s--- on stage when you're active and tryina liven up a crowd if you can't even spit that s--- in a booth?

That said, this is pretty dope. I do agree that you could've been more animated throughout (you kind of have a Mac Miller vibe goin on) but it's laid back and I wouldn't mind bumpin it again. Daps, son.

 

Apr 15, 2015

as for performing live, hopefully im turning up so much that i dont even need to finish my lines

 

Apr 15, 2015

That beat with my headphones

Really enjoyed this. I enjoyed your last cypher, but this is a lot better. I prefer the way your voice was on this track. Never got out of breath you kept it focused and could make out what you were saying a lot clearer.

A Narsh tag has me like

 

Apr 15, 2015