Jun 8, 2015

thugger fam @George Washington @Squid @Blorpy @Big Mitch idk more people listen 2 it pls

 

Jun 8, 2015

You need to rap about b------s and money more
Jk, it's pretty nice. The bars and mixing are on point.
I'd be interested to see what a hook would sound like on something like this. The rhyming is impressive, no doubt, but I feel like a hook would draw people to it more. (Not necessarily on this, but on future tracks). I don't know, I'm not a professional
Keep it up, though!

Edit: Def not on this, but a slower hook that melts into a verse with this flow/bars/level of hardness

 

Jun 8, 2015

my hook writing game is non existent i.e. im not a real songwriter aka im a bad artist

but ill work on it for sure, good looks on the feedback m8

 

Jun 8, 2015

I've f----- around in the rap game before and hooks are a lot harder to perfect than people think they are, lol. So I feel where you're coming from on that one.

 

Jun 9, 2015

@Narsh Loved the start of it. SIMHA SIMHA SIMHA was dope. This one was really good. One of the best I've heard from you bro

 

Jun 9, 2015

appreciate it man! simha simha simhaaa

 

Jun 9, 2015

One thing that I've noticed in most of your songs (not so much this one; I like it a lot) is that your vocab can get pretty crazy and you use some huge/out of the ordinary f---in words haha. It's something that I don't hear in hip-hop. At least with the artists I listen to. IDK if you're trying to sound intelligent (you do) or that's just how you talk, but maybe use lyrics that are more quotable/easy to remember idk. Maybe I feel that way because I'm just an idiot and don't get them idk. It's just kinda weird hearing the Thug influence to go along with the smart vocabulary.

Don't wanna sound like a d-ck or anything please don't hate me

It's just if I were an aspiring artist I would love hearing constructive criticism so that's what I'm trying to do lol. Hopefully what I made somehow made sense.

 

Jun 9, 2015

what you're saying makes sense 100% and is for the kind of feedback im looking for

id rather people get used to or grow to like my style rather than trying to make it more accesible, ya know? but you hit the nail on the head w/ my writing not being too quotable a lot of the times

dying @ thug influence w/ smart vocab. my n----- he rhymes the word phallus in Halftime, Thug is smarter than me

also when i do have section that are like "accesible" lyric wise i ended doing something with the delivery that makes it hard to get to, like when i go Eminem-level super sonic here:

bait me and tempt but girly im surely already your brodie
im broly unfolding my hair is now growing
and changing some colors like the bud that im smoking
i mustve been morphing and trust me not often
can one just evolve with passion its usually the talent and practice
and i feel like laughing but sad for the champions
that’ll never get praise when they’re better than
me but i know i deserve this s---
i know it i know it im simha b----


this is easier to get into:

its snowing and snowing like everest
and oding on mountains of heaven sent
chemicals acing em like a test
temperament tested and tampered with

and then this is a good combination of both delivery and lyrics imo:

im an anomaly rhyming
she following me like im saying im simon
she satan she’s violent
and prone to be silent
for forty some hours or days i dont buy it
she’s thinking she’s pious i ask her whys that


but yeah thats just my take on my own s--- lol stuff i need to keep in mind should i ever work on a real project

 

Jun 9, 2015

Definitely keep it up then. Rather you make your own sound instead of sounding like and biting off other artists... Cough Logic cough

 

Jun 9, 2015

thought @captain awesome would like the first bit tbh, all dat boston swag

im swimming in money thats promised
coming in form of a scholarship
im trippin im wearin no kicks again
im rugged im trippin in public
walk in the city its common
its common in Boston i vomit
its common i work by the commons
i hustle i burn at the commons
im trippin im floating by gardens
trippin im trippin im falling
im missin the misery often

 

Jun 9, 2015

im clearly biting thug on a lot of my newer s--- but its part of growing /shrug

IM MINORIN IN BEIN AWESOME

 

Jun 9, 2015

I wrote one too:

Gettin head off Head Place
By the common
Bilious cretins
Secretin an ocean
of memories
i lurk, i tip toe through glaciers
i whip hoes, still flippin through Lasers
Mass Ave can't hold me, I'm thirsty
A burst of raw focus, I'm held by the nasty
Where's Narsh, where's Narsh
This city can't keep me from him

 

Jun 9, 2015

Dope..

when are you dropping a full length Young Thug tribute album?

 

Jun 9, 2015

barter 7 otw

 

Jun 14, 2015

bump

 

Jun 17, 2015

 

Jun 17, 2015

n----- you pull your back everytime you try to flex...cuz you too fat

 

Jun 17, 2015

what's your height/weight @Narsh

 

Jun 17, 2015

You're like the Facebook people who comment or like their own posts weeks/months/years later

 

Jun 17, 2015

My ghostwriting game is on point tho

Reported

5 8

210 and dropping eryday like a narsh track

Edit: *thug track