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Started by Deadpool, Oct 11, 2015, in Creative Add to Reading List

  1. Ordinary Joel
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    Ordinary Joel Happiness begins when selfishness ends

    Oct 11, 2015
    You should suss that out imo. Would be good experience especially if you're gonna incorporate singing into your songs. Wouldn't hurt to try.
     
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    Oct 11, 2015
    next semester i am
     
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    Ordinary Joel Happiness begins when selfishness ends

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    Good stuff!
     
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  4. Narsh
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    Oct 11, 2015
    beat is so dope..

    and i really like how the vocals are mixed actually. hook is the worst part lol, dont really like how its written or delivered, but the melody is nice

    verse is cool for sure...the restraint was well suited for this song.
     
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  5. Deadpool
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    thanks fam produced and made the song friday night,

    ye i focus more on melody so i feel u on the hook but as they say if it gets catchy enough it works lol
     
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  6. Immy
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    I like the verses a lot man. You sound natural over the beat, it's hot
     
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  7. Ordinary Joel
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    Ordinary Joel Happiness begins when selfishness ends

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    The f---ing hook is stuck in my head.

    So it works.

    :ashgray:
     
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  8. Narsh
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    Narsh

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    just the voice itself on the hook in this version is to whiny as someone else said...like, even if u just went and re sung less robotically and w/o altering ur voice as much it would be a looot better
     
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  9. Deadpool
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    ye u know mixing/recording the vocals as an artist/engineer u struggle with always tryning to break out your comfort zone and im always tryna do that, i recorded 4 different versions of the hook so i see what your saying about the altering it, but i kept playing all of em and wanted to go for the out the box one and got this lol i appreciate u even looking into this much b thats dope
     
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    Jax aka Chamillionaire jr
     
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    i wish :drakeo:
     
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  13. pluto✰
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    pluto✰ where the opioids?

    Oct 11, 2015
    it sounds like you're talking way more than yore flowing/rapping

    can't get with the chorus at all :/ production is on point though, sounds like some Cudi s---.
     
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    used alot of restraint its the way i wanted it thanks for the feedback tho bro
     
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    Oct 11, 2015
    A harmony with a female vocal would be dope
     
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    yea if i can get this to be a reference track for someone that would dope

    just re-uploaded with drums higher :kapppa:
     
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    Cyreides gfy

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