May 19, 2016 This song is me finally just starting to say whatever I want in my music on social issues, regardless of what people think, Hence the "Kanye Of Broward County" line in the description. I'd like to know people's thoughts on what I said in this song, some things I said people might not like but hey if it sparks a discussion I accomplished something.
May 19, 2016 Beat is pretty cool You do sound like Joey Badass :P The message seems shallow and lacking content "Kids die everyday" "f--- Donald Trump" etc. It's not that is wrong per se or that I'm ignoring your social background but since you're trying to spark a conversation I believe you should employ more convincing and thought provoking lyrics so we can understand the subject matter of the song better and have an actual discussion about it Good s--- though
May 19, 2016 Thanks for the insight man, I was a little aware that it might come off as that. In future songs I'll try to shed more light and be a little less cliche. Appreciate the feedback fr bro.
May 19, 2016 would down it, but there wouldnt be any metadata for it in groove so it would be relegated to my rejects folder and be doomed to me not listening to it .
May 19, 2016 i did, im saying im not downloading it, its a good song, but the rhyme scheme sounds too one dimensional and sometimes feels repetetive. The pronunciation of "Mayne" seems too forced. Otherwise from that the lyrics seem decent, just work on the technique and flow a little, and try to be more creative in your rhyming .
May 19, 2016 the reason im not downloading it is because it wouldnt fit well into my library it would read as an unknown song from an unknown artist and would stand out (and no cover photo either) that s why
Jun 7, 2016 It sounds dope during the parts when you rap about issues more eloquently and not so straight forward like other parts. I've ran into the same issue with a concious rap I'm working on. It's a balance/ struggle of trying to say what you want to say while delivering it smooth and cleverly. But overall it's a good song.
Jun 7, 2016 i feel like you were trying to say something impactful and meaningful, but after 3 listens, it really didn't do much for me... topics were all over the place and didn't convince me of anything or make me feel much of anything either. no hate, just being honest.
Jun 7, 2016 Yea it was a struggle on this song a bit, trying to balance how I feel and trying not to sound preachy, Probably my most preachy song to date tbh. I don't regret writing it but it's a learning process for me.
Jun 7, 2016 Thanks for the feedback everyone, glad some people like it. Also appreciate the feedback about it not being clear enough. It was clear enough for me because I knew what I was writing about but I didn't want to go too in depth about the situations in the song because frankly I want to save those personal stories for future songs like songs on projects. I know how to go in depth believe me but I didn't want to do that in this song. I do see however how hard it might be to understand the song a bit. Just like J Apex said it was a struggle balancing that.
Jun 7, 2016 Sounds decent. Don't give a s--- about BLM / Trump etc so can't really comment on the content
