Help Need help with a bio

Started by Cyreides, Nov 14, 2015, in Creative Add to Reading List

  1. Cyreides
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    Cyreides gfy

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    Loyalty we go hard on earth

    Nov 15, 2015
    First sentence is kinda wordy (especially before the first comma). Second sentence should say "creative". Also it seems kinda weird mentioning FL studios in the bio but maybe that's cuz I'm not a producer.

    I like where it's going though!
     
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    Nov 15, 2015
    agreed

    this is why i'm not a writer lol
    typos, meant to say desire to create
    also agree, but I wasn't sure how to really describe that otherwise
     
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    Ordinary Joel Happiness begins when selfishness ends

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    Ohio-based producer Sebastian Chapman, otherwise known as Cyreides, sets out to bring vivid stories to life through his music. Specializing in the realms of electronic, trip-hop and EDM, his music can paint pictures for you through his production alone.

    With three years worth of experience, he has released two projects thus far. His debut 'Bittersweet EP' can be classified as his step forward into this pathway, whilst his sophomore effort, 'Coldest Winter', could be seen as his breakout project that helped refine his style.

    His third release is just around the corner, with 'Autumn Storm' most likely to be his best project yet.

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    Not sure if what I've written is good or not. Just trying to help. :ohno:

    @Cyreides
     
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    Loyalty we go hard on earth

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    I like this a lot! Good work Joel. I would just take out the red words, I really have no other criticism. It's great. :)
     
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    Nov 16, 2015
    This is great.

    CA asked me some questions and then refined my answers to add to this a little bit. I have to finish some of it up, but if I can somehow combine the best of what @Ordinary Joel posted with this, I think it'll actually work.

    Ohio-based electronic/hip hop producer Sebastian Chapman, otherwise
    known as Cyreides, sets out to bring vivid stories to life through his
    music. And although the he’s always had a desire to be create, it
    wasn’t until the summer of 2013 when picked up a copy of FL Studios on
    a whim and found where his place was in the production world.

    Cyreides claims to "love music more than life itself" and describes his process as a beautiful effort to portray the colors and emotions he sees in his head.

    "I want people to get to know my life, my emotions, my struggle
    with depression, my fear of things," said Cyreides. "I want them to know the pain,
    sorrow, raw energy, and then to feel the dark beauty and chaos of my life."

    A fan of XX, Cyreides produces beats that YY.

    Cyreides is currently gearing up for the release of his album “Autumn
    Storm” this November.
     
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    Ohio-based producer Sebastian Chapman, AKA Cyreides, specializes in the realms of electronic, trip-hop and EDM. And although the he’s always had a desire to create, it wasn’t until the summer of 2013 when he picked up FL Studios on a whim and found where his place was in the production world. Now with three years of experience, he has put out two projects, and his sophomore effort, 'Coldest Winter', could be seen as his breakout project that helped him refine his style.

    Cyreides claims to "love music more than life itself" and describes his process as a beautiful effort to portray the colors and emotions he sees in his head.

    "I want people to get to know my life, my emotions, my struggle with depression, my fear of things," said Cyreides. "I want them to know the pain, sorrow, raw energy, and then to feel the dark beauty and chaos of my life."

    A fan of artists ranging from Nero to Nirvana, Cyreides produces music that can paint pictures for you through his production alone, and brings in artists to compliment his over the top, yet minimalist style, as a way of breathing even more life into the stories he tells.

    Cyreides is currently gearing up for the release of his album “Autumn Storm” this November, and it's set to be his best work yet.

     
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    Ordinary Joel Happiness begins when selfishness ends

    Nov 23, 2015
    :clap:

    I like it.

    Highlighted part is a typo you need to remove.
     
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    Nov 23, 2015
    CA thought I should get your thoughts on this again @WPG

    Ohio-based producer Sebastian Chapman, AKA Cyreides, specializes in
    electronic, trip-hop and EDM. Though he’s
    always had a desire to create, it wasn’t until summer 2013 when
    picked up FL Studios on a whim and found his place in the
    production world. After releasing "The Coldest Winter" earlier this
    year, his latest project "Autumn Storm" further refines his style in
    new and exciting ways.

    Cyreides claims to "love music more than life itself" and describes
    his process as a beautiful effort to portray the colors and emotions
    he sees in his head.

    "I want people to get to know my life, my emotions, my struggle with
    depression, my fear of things," said Cyreides. "I want them to know
    the pain, sorrow, raw energy, and then to feel the dark beauty and
    chaos of my life."

    A fan of artists ranging from Nero to Nirvana, Cyreides produces music
    that can paint pictures for you through his production alone, and
    brings in artists to compliment his over the top, yet minimalist
    style, as a way of breathing even more life into the stories he tells.

    Cyreides is currently gearing up for the release of his album “Autumn
    Storm” this November, and it's set to be his best work yet.
     
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