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Started by Narsh, Jan 11, 2016, in Creative Add to Reading List

  1. Narsh
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    Narsh

    Jan 11, 2016

    The brown kid got called sp**
    Or that n----- not jokin
    I'm Indian I'm focused
    No prefix I'm that kid
    I'm perfect my nose drips
    I'm that sick, I snort s---
    I sniff things I've coughed blood
    I love drugs, got caught once
    That's not enough Got caught again
    My mamma should've aborted me
    She never should've supported me
    I let her down like forgery
    On school tests I'm useless
    I used to listen to ruthless
    Records wreck the pretense
    It's all their fault
    It's all their fault
    they gave me love
    It's all their fault They coddled me
    It's not my fault When I am buzzed
    I'm lost inside a muddy cup
    It's hard to see inside this box
    It's genetics get it leave I
    Alone so I can get high
    I just wanna get by
    Not excel f--- excel
    I never gave a f--- bout numbers
    It's not my fault I'm an angel
    Dust inside my arrogance
    My narrative ain't fair to them
    But I don't care
    I carry on like Aryans
    I don't care
    I love the white the pair of them
    And I'm aware
    The blow and bars will cancel out
    I've often thought bout dropping out
    The pills have filled my conscience now
    I love em despite the hate they cause
    I love to spite my native cause
    I love to list out all my flaws
    I'm excused inside this alcohol
    Stuck inside metaphorical
    I gotta pass it lateral
    I caught a charge now static I'm
    Stuck until they sort it out
    The judge my trust inside the law
    Ain't grown as much as lost it all
    I've sewn myself shut from them all
    I know I've messed up everything
    I'm sorry mom for everything
    I'm sorry dad my everything
    I just hope they see I'm genuine
    I just hope don't pray tho lost religion
    Cope with bud I copped prescriptions
    For coughs I've had since I was six and
    Now it's for a muddy cup
    I've got it all so I'm fed up
    with myself for my lack all love
    For my privilege I got the gall
    To get high just so there's a fall
    I let life fly see you all
    When I'm dead and gone
    My head is strong no I'm headstrong
    I'm strung out so I get sum
    More to smoke I'm the jetsons
    That's high around my family
    High when I should be saddled in
    High to hide insecurities
    Say goodbye to purity
    I've said goodbye truancy
    Abusing these hallucinogens
    Infusing with me a few mood swings
    Don't stop the beat I ain't through with it
    I've felt I should've been so rich
    Therein lies my arrogance
    Where can I go to get out of my skin
    I'm drinking I'm smoking I lost in a binge
    I'm winking I'm joking but crying within
    I couldn't be more blunt if I was lighting something
    I couldn't be more clear that shouldn't be singing
    But I'm singin again
    I'm drinkin the gin
    I've been with the sin since simplicity missed me
    I'll soon have a kid that I hope will still love me
    When I am fifty
    A causality causally causing a shift
    And a rift in the blueprint
    When I was a kid I know I that they loved me
    These thoughts are a bungee
    They're snapping me back to reality
    I'm falling and all them ain't willing to catch me
    And I understand why they're happy
    With letting me splatter
    I'm stuck in the banter
    I've gave them karma

    I can only sit and wait for my curtain call
    I've been contemplating whether I'll just force the fall

    @Skippy @Cyreides @Jet @LasiK @Charlie Strangelove @Mike Tyson @BigCountry @Enigma @Michael Myers @yeezyfan11 @ChanceTheRapper @Maximus @rapmusik @Boos @Loyalty @Music @Ordinary Joel @Big Mitch @Ozy @FlawlessT @shahidah @Winter @Radeem @zazou @Squid @King V @Young Slime @M.I.C. @Deadpool @YaBoyTr @Soldier @Nay Nay @Pato @my ice lit @KnowRayJones etc.

    enjoyy :emoji_heart:
     
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  2. Cyreides
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    Cyreides gfy

    Jan 11, 2016
    actually really digging this
     
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  3. Narsh
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    Narsh

    Jan 11, 2016
    [​IMG]
     
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  4. Big Mitch
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    Big Mitch You never made me ran once

    Jan 11, 2016
    The brown kid got called sp**
    Or that n----- not jokin
    I'm Indian I'm focused
    No prefix I'm that kid
    I'm perfect my nose drips
    I'm that sick, I snort s---
    I sniff things I've coughed blood
    I love drugs, got caught once
    That's not enough Got caught again

    This part was f---in great.
     
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  5. Ordinary Joel
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    Ordinary Joel Happiness begins when selfishness ends

    Jan 11, 2016
    d--- you fit a lot into this, you could've maybe took a few things out to slow down your delivery. Felt rushed in bits.

    But overall a chill track.
     
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  6. Narsh
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    Narsh

    Jan 11, 2016
    thats just the tip of da iceberg

    literally

    :heheh2:
     
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  7. Narsh
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    Narsh

    Jan 11, 2016
    not my strong suit lmao i have no filter :wow2: one of my biggest flaws
     
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    Music

    Jan 11, 2016
    same

    dled this

    :emoji_fire::emoji_fire:
     
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  9. Maximus
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    Maximus Skeppy

    Jan 11, 2016
    sherlock gif

    rate you slightly higher now
     
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    Base Reality AKA Chewie

    Jan 11, 2016
    Liking this, for some reason you seem to sound a lot better on a beat like this. Dope!
     
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  11. Narsh
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    Narsh

    Jan 11, 2016
    thanks for listening/the feedback btw. glad you guys enjoyed it
     
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  12. Lil Squeed
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    Lil Squeed French Montana Stan

    Jan 11, 2016
    Ooooooooooooooooo wheeeew
    :sweatt:
    The emotion!
    I like it.
     
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    rapmusik 4

    Jan 11, 2016
    this.

    had me like
    [​IMG]
     
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    Narsh

    Jan 11, 2016
    thats the easy part tho :wow2:
     
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    rapmusik 4

    Jan 11, 2016
    well shut up I'm still listening
     
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    Narsh

    Jan 11, 2016
    love you
     
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  17. LasiK
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    LasiK d-mn fine coffee

    Jan 11, 2016
    I can only sit and wait for my curtain call

    that line is one of the first i've heard u sing on something that was in tune. and i'm not dissing that is a great thing. means your delivery and vocal control is getting better.
     
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  18. rapmusik
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    rapmusik 4

    Jan 11, 2016
    okay I'm done now.

    thought that was a really good verse. favourite parts were the beginning and the ending bits. the curtain call s--- was great and I honestly loved the way it sounded
     
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    Narsh

    Jan 11, 2016
    It couldn't be more clear that I shouldn't be singing
    But I'm singin again

    :banderas: ive heard ur laughs lasik ive heard em, im tryina bless up

     
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    Big Mitch You never made me ran once

    Jan 11, 2016
     
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